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The White Friar

Sniper said: "if u live by the words u say then u got ma respect bro...nice flow, contnet, etc"

Specter said: "[QUOTE=Subterranean Way]WHAT vertigo is trying to say is..... THAT SHIT WAS WACK!!!!!!!im sorry. i tried to hold back and give "polite" criticsism (however u spell it), but i cant let u possibly think your verse was decent. on top of that, on audio it would be even gayer!my ass crack can make a betteer audio than you. QUIT HIP HOP U FUCKIN WEAK ASS WANNA BE, FAGGOT EMCEE LOSER!!!!. UR DISGRACIN HIP-HOP. ON SECOND THOUGHTNOW UR NOT. CAUSE THAT WASNT HIP-HOP!!!!!!THAT WAS A WHITE BOYS PATHETIC ATTEMPT AT A RAP VERSE!!!(i have nuttin against white rappers, i used to love eminem untill he got all super mainstream). WHITE FRIAR U NEED TO PRACTICE A HELL OF A LOT, IT ISNT TO LATE. BUT AT THIS POINT IN UR RHYMING POTETIAL, U SUCK ASS!! srry i had to get that off my chest. no hard feelings man. its the truth.[/QUOTE] u talkin all that shit homie why dont you battle him then?????"

thadangerousdon9 said: "Chyll on tha crackur jokes man...I'm half-whyte...Err..Sumthin' close to that..Lyk 30-ish percent..But anyway..as for tha verse..Yooh started out rele strong man..And then at sum point it jus' kinda went downhill to tha end....Jus' wryte with tha same passion when yooh finish as when yooh start...Peace"

keepinittrill said: "that shit wasnt that tight.....nigga sounds like a white ass pussy"

Whitey_VTS said: "subteranian u a fuckin loser"

The White Friar said: "PLZ CRITIQUE Yeah The White Friar and i'm new to the site/ Not tryin' to turn this HHW upside down over night/ Im here to respect the Vets/ take all the critics I can get/ fullfill my debt, till they consider me a threat/ Altough its in my heart to reign as king of the throne/ I sit home alone and smoke to much homegrown/ and think of rhymes that could make any newb cry/ Ya get ya ass kicked like Tom Cruise in The Last Samauri/ You jus a small fry/ i'm a tongue tied tough guy/ I damage earlobes everytime you hear me speak/ my technique is unique like im speakin Ancient Greek/ your raps are weak/ come grab my dik while I'm takin' a leak/ thats jus a sneak peak of my oblique physique/ meanwhile you jus playin' hide and go seek/ tryin to find ways that u could beat your meat/ I'm discrete but daily i defeat the elite/ bounce em off the concrete and leave em dead in the street/ Yeah jus a little message from the White Friar/ But jus for the moment i'm about to retire......................... Out................................ Gorilla Pimpin' Bitch One on One Ive only jus begun"

The White Friar said: "Yo fuk u subway i aint seen 1 post other then a critique from yo ass yet. Yeah and jus cause I'm white dont think I wont beat yo ass to a bloody pulp. You better make sure you keep your ass out the joint talkin all that bitch shit get u a couple mouth shots at least. P.S. get off Canabitch's nut sac faggot"

The White Friar said: "I Aint Tryin To Be That Tight Trill Jus Lookin' For Some Critique So I Can Get Better. Yeah And Fuk U On That White Ass Pussy Shit Nobody Said Shit To U. U Gotta Be Bored Writin' Some Response On Some Shit I Posted Days Ago. Fukin Faggot Keep My Dik Out Ya Mouth."

Vertigo said: "It's the rhythm that bothers me, but I think I'm the only one around here. If there's not some beat somewhere in the freaking galaxy that you could put to your lyrics/put your lyrics to/phrase how you like... well, it's not rap, or any form of hip-hop for that matter. It's just a series of words that may or may not rhyme and probably aren't nearly as effective as they're supposed to be. So that's my suggestion. Get at least a semblance of order into the rhythm and timing of your shit and try again. It's a lot easier to put together good material in the short amount of time you'll usually have when there's some structure to it."

wmx7tx said: "That was raw fam"

karnage said: "lol... sub left the site apparently... someone tell him he's currently losing in our battle"

karnage said: "iight,, this is from a recent cypha with a fellow crew member...kinda long... we dont do bar limits.... ...TEAS OR COFFEE?, please EASE UP OFF ME or my TEAM'LL SOFTLY end ya BREATHING SHORTLY// Reaperz are FELONS BORN who escaped from hell with SEVEN SWORDS & forced our way through HEAVENS DOORS in an UNPLEASANT FORM with WEAPONS DRAWN :mad: I've seen trash~in~posts from a mass~of~ folks who received SEVERE BEATINGS// you aint PREPARED EVEN, though you still brag~&~boast but aint rapping~ close to anything we've ever sat~&~wrote// I'm crafting~notes & never SPARE FEELINGS// we're ill enough to laugh~at~ghosts & ride with FEARED DEMONS who make rappers~choke & sacrifice cats~&~goats my HOARD OF SPIES pack SWORDS OF KINDS with blades of ENORMOUS SIZE sharp enough to DEFORM YA SPINE// the LORDS OF CRIMES, some ARMED WITH KNIVES or pack luggage with BOMBS DISGUISED as COMBS INSIDE// we'll HARM YA PRIDE while exposing ya FLAWS IN TIME// so any crew with the BALLS TO TRY, can FORM A LINE.... but they'll all most likely CRAWL & HIDE// we pack RAZOR BLADES & LASER RAYS, trained & TAILOR MADE to SLAY THE GAYS// aim & SPRAY GRENADES, the RAGE UNTAMED to REMAIN UNSCATHED while defending~our~ rep// get FAME & PRAISE, stay MAJOR PAID, so we could outdo FLAVOR FLAV... & rock Big Ben~on~our~neck :cool:"

Subterranean Way said: "ewww. not particularly my favortie verse. kind of generic. scratch that. very generic. multis-0 wordplay-0 flow-4.5 creativity-3 metaphors-1 punchlines-2 Vocabulary- 1 overall-2 (out of 10) This verse is a perfect example of NO CREATIVITY.LACK OF ENTERTAINMENT. AND QUITE FRAKLY.... WACK RAPPING!!.i'm not trying to be mean but this verse just wasnt good. [B]Yeah The White Friar and i'm new to the site/ Not tryin' to turn this HHW upside down over night/[/B](????. come on. that was just simply lame.) [B]Im here to respect the Vets/ take all the critics I can get/[/B](u NEED all the critics u can get. u really do) [B]fullfill my debt, till they consider me a threat/ Altough its in my heart to reign as king of the throne/ I sit home alone and smoke to much homegrown/[/B](that was sloppy ass structure. what u said before it didint flow together at all.and on top of that, who gives a shit if u smoke weed?thaat gets so old come on now.) [B]and think of rhymes that could make any newb cry/ Ya get ya ass kicked like Tom Cruise in The Last Samauri/[/B](hmm. the line subsequent to the punchline was horrible. the punchline was decent although it lacked creativity.) [B]your raps are weak/ come grab my dik while I'm takin' a leak/ thats jus a sneak peak of my oblique physique/ meanwhile you jus playin' hide and go seek/ tryin to find ways that u could beat your meat/[/B] (lol. i couldnt stop laughing at how gay htis part was. come grab ur dick while u take a leak?no thanks i'll pass. that was wack as hell. and then lmao u said tryin to fidn ways to beat ur meat. lol. funny. NOT. just really gay. that was on an elementary level.) [B]bounce em off the concrete and leave em dead in the street/ Yeah jus a little message from the White Friar/ But jus for the moment i'm about to retire.........................[/B] (hahaha do us a favor? instead of retiring for the moment, why dont u take a permenant leave from the hip hop section of music.) no offense. like u said, you'll "take all the critics i can get" lol"

Subterranean Way said: "WHAT vertigo is trying to say is..... THAT SHIT WAS WACK!!!!!!!im sorry. i tried to hold back and give "polite" criticsism (however u spell it), but i cant let u possibly think your verse was decent. on top of that, on audio it would be even gayer!my ass crack can make a betteer audio than you. QUIT HIP HOP U FUCKIN WEAK ASS WANNA BE, FAGGOT EMCEE LOSER!!!!. UR DISGRACIN HIP-HOP. ON SECOND THOUGHTNOW UR NOT. CAUSE THAT WASNT HIP-HOP!!!!!!THAT WAS A WHITE BOYS PATHETIC ATTEMPT AT A RAP VERSE!!!(i have nuttin against white rappers, i used to love eminem untill he got all super mainstream). WHITE FRIAR U NEED TO PRACTICE A HELL OF A LOT, IT ISNT TO LATE. BUT AT THIS POINT IN UR RHYMING POTETIAL, U SUCK ASS!! srry i had to get that off my chest. no hard feelings man. its the truth."

Subterranean Way said: "[QUOTE=Specter]u talkin all that shit homie why dont you battle him then?????[/QUOTE] alright then i will. I CHALLENGE UR BITCH ASS WHITE FRIAR!!!!!!AND KARNAGE, SET UP THE BATTLE THREAD SO I CAN RAPE UR GAY ASS!!!"

MisteR KeeF said: "A... that last post made me laugh almost as much as your original post.... I feel bad beatin' up on kids - but I'll battle you... I threw some free verses up a couple of days ago on here...Throw up your worthless verses so I can pick 'em apart.... If someone else wants to set up some guidelines go ahead... I'm not much for formalities but I'll abide by whatever....I'll go first if you want to cry about it.... I'll be watchin' - "Yeah and jus cause I'm white dont think I wont beat yo ass to a bloody pulp." <--- That shits comedy ---"